Sunday, March 28, 2010
Whatcha think?
Hey guys! How is everyone? Good i hope. So i had a thought this week. Im sort of a writer and i got an idea for a piece. This the gyst of it: Two kids have had a normal life life so far at ages ten and thirteen. But their lives are soon to change. In the middle of the night 10 year old Lindsey wakes in the middle of the night due to doors slamming outside. Peeking out the window she sees about a dozen men in black suits with guns. She runs to evacuate her house to find her parents arent there. The doors break down and the men with guns are in. Lindsey runs to her older brother Kevin and they flee the house never to return again.... I have more i deas but i think it was best put that way. If you guys think its a good idea or a bad idea oor you think of better names or follow up ideas email me or leave a comment i messed up a bit and my email is now Blundenblog@yahoo.com . Email me!! Tell me what you think!! Thanks guys!! (:
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I like the story idea, really, i do, but its like you're baking a cake. You just miixed the dough, and its substantial, but thats all. substancial. You could do so much to make it tastier! Add cinnamon, sprinkles, chocolate chips, anything! It may make a difference in the end.
ReplyDeleteI hope you get my metaphor. Good luck!
SaNDrA……………yea :P
Thanks! That helps alot! And nice use of metaphors!! Very creative!! :) Thanks for the advice Sandra!
ReplyDeleteHey love it so far but, add some taste.Ya get what i'm saying.LIke they go to explore the world they are soon to fid their parents dead in a body pile outside with a sign saying"These are trespassers they have rosen upon us to fight do this to us, and this is what we'll do to you"They run and travel the world sovilg they the mysterie of the black dressed men and many more and keep writing like that (mysteries murders). ove ya blogs keep writing like this and you'll become a writer some day.
ReplyDelete13 tr. old Savannah,Chillax and stay cool fo meh and "type" back.
so chrissy i think you should change the Kevin to Evan because it sounds better. also, what are they going to do after they leave? find there parents? forget about them and go into some fascinating journey and later reunite with their parents?
ReplyDeleteTheyll probably go on some adventure trying to find out about their parents and come to some surprising dicoveries and have to face them and all the while running from the Black suited men.And Of course you do Evan. But i got some great rates on the name kevin.
ReplyDeleteOh and Those are some great ideas Savannah! I will deffinately use them thanks a bunch!
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